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Post by Deleted on Feb 6, 2016 5:50:56 GMT
Here's a short film I made in December. It's been finished for about two weeks. I know of the issues it has, but give an honest critique and tell me what you think.
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Post by Deleted on Feb 6, 2016 5:52:11 GMT
I will say, trying to act, direct and do cameras in tough.
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Post by Roger Force on Feb 6, 2016 8:35:54 GMT
thanks tom fulp
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Post by Deleted on Feb 6, 2016 9:32:54 GMT
He's a cool guy, plus he let me use artwork that isn't mine, so whatever.
What do you think about it instead of writing something stupid.
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Post by Roger Force on Feb 6, 2016 9:40:40 GMT
it's like bojack horseman in a way. but i don't understand why he cares about the elf at the end??
did the elf kill his parents
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Post by Deleted on Feb 6, 2016 10:12:16 GMT
I am somewhat sorry I got testy, thinking about it now anyway. I am all for jokes but i felt that wasn't one. Anyway. First I've heard that it reminded someone of bojack horseman. no the elf didn't kill his parents. If you listen to the dialogue carefully, you realize that the elf in both doll form and human form, are actually in his mind. Detailing the internal struggle within himself about what he should do as far as trying to move on and whatnot.
In the scene where Barney is holding the doll before the ceremony, barney says, "my god you're right!" Elfie responds with, "Of course you are."
That is pretty much the telltale sign. Unfortunately the music was mixed a little too loud so it's kind of hard to hear them talk at that part. I may remix the music and dialogue later on. The fight scene (which I wanted to be longer originally), the ceremony, I guess all the scenes with the elf could be removed and if it were just Barney talking to himself and if conveyed correctly it would work the same. I just wanted to do something funny or weird mixed with some deep stuff dealing with a form of loss, moving on, etc.
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He cared about Elfie because in a way that was part of himself he was killing.
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Post by N4-PR on Feb 6, 2016 13:18:15 GMT
Tell me about barney, why does he wear the mask?
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Post by Deleted on Feb 7, 2016 5:00:28 GMT
the mask is actually supposed to be his face. Yes its a cheap mask. There's a backstory for him I have, why he looks the way he does, etc, which will be explained in subsequent episodes. Did no one listen to anything that was said in the video?
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Post by N4-PR on Feb 7, 2016 12:45:00 GMT
the mask is actually supposed to be his face. Yes its a cheap mask. There's a backstory for him I have, why he looks the way he does, etc, which will be explained in subsequent episodes. Did no one listen to anything that was said in the video? If I take it off, will he die?
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Post by Deleted on Feb 15, 2016 6:14:05 GMT
I guess it's a possibility, sure.
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Post by Roger Force on Feb 15, 2016 9:01:11 GMT
are you filming the second one
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Post by risbolla on Feb 15, 2016 9:05:16 GMT
the mask is actually supposed to be his face. Yes its a cheap mask. There's a backstory for him I have, why he looks the way he does, etc, which will be explained in subsequent episodes. Did no one listen to anything that was said in the video? If I take it off, will he die? ehehehe hehehe,,,,,ehh ''his a big guy'' hhahahahaha
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Post by Deleted on Feb 15, 2016 9:32:44 GMT
are you filming the second one Eventually. I'm still brainstorming a bit. I've also had a hard time motivating myself as of late
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Post by N4-PR on Feb 15, 2016 15:26:46 GMT
If I take it off, will he die? ehehehe hehehe,,,,,ehh ''his a big guy'' hhahahahaha
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